Cowboy Bebop was always a big inspiration for me, and thought it would be cool for Avery's first ship to be inspired by it (a mix between that and the first ship I got in NMS). I take it that you don't like it?
Thanks! Lettering is one thing I still struggle to do sadly lol! Hopefully, with more practice I'll be able to write a legible font. Glad you were able to enjoy it despite the fact!
The visuals and panel layout are a masterpiece! Dino is a fun foil. I like how ze teases Avery for chickening out on something that ze can't do anyway. I enjoyed the worldbuilding, but there is not enough 'show, don't tell.' in this first episode. Especially the reference to 'clicks,' would be improved by just integrating the money context into the dialog. For example, Avery: "five clicks was a lot of money for us back then!" I had trouble reading the font, though it got easier by the end. I also would have preferred an e-reader layout as opposed to the print layout.
Thanks a bunch for such an in depth comment! I know I'm replying to this 2 years too late but when I read the comment initially it really stuck with me, and has made me consider it in a lot of things I create now! I hope you'll enjoy future epsiodes when they (eventually) arrive!
Thanks! When I started this my experience with writing was preeety lacking! But having the feedback has since helped me consider how to approach things differently and hopefully enhance future episodes.
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The Swordfish? Really?
Cowboy Bebop was always a big inspiration for me, and thought it would be cool for Avery's first ship to be inspired by it (a mix between that and the first ship I got in NMS). I take it that you don't like it?
The visuals and colours are great! Loved the drawings :) I found the font a bit difficult to read, but overall very nice!
Thanks! Lettering is one thing I still struggle to do sadly lol! Hopefully, with more practice I'll be able to write a legible font. Glad you were able to enjoy it despite the fact!
Loved the characters right away! The art is great and the comic is an easy read.
Thank you!
Nice comics !!! I absolutely loved the colors and the chara designs :)
Thanks so much!
This is... excellent! You've clearly put a lot of thought into the character design, and I love the colors and overall drawing style.
Aww thanks! I do enjoy character design most out of everything - so I'm happy you've liked that aspect so much!
The visuals and panel layout are a masterpiece!
Dino is a fun foil. I like how ze teases Avery for chickening out on something that ze can't do anyway.
I enjoyed the worldbuilding, but there is not enough 'show, don't tell.' in this first episode. Especially the reference to 'clicks,' would be improved by just integrating the money context into the dialog. For example, Avery: "five clicks was a lot of money for us back then!"
I had trouble reading the font, though it got easier by the end. I also would have preferred an e-reader layout as opposed to the print layout.
Thanks a bunch for such an in depth comment! I know I'm replying to this 2 years too late but when I read the comment initially it really stuck with me, and has made me consider it in a lot of things I create now! I hope you'll enjoy future epsiodes when they (eventually) arrive!
The writing could be tighter but your artwork shows a TON of promise. Well done.
Thanks! When I started this my experience with writing was preeety lacking! But having the feedback has since helped me consider how to approach things differently and hopefully enhance future episodes.